Rude Awakening
Rude awakeningI dreamt a dream of paradisethere every thing was bright and fair,there was no greed or avariceamongst the people living there.There everything was bright and fairall lived at peace in...
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Ouch the stark reality of the last lines compared to the idealstic dreams of the poem was a powerful statement Wanton grief, takes the place of eternal peace/ dark and cold, memories I forever hold/...
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Rude awakening for sure!Super write, ivor...and a great form done perfectly of course ~Alaura"You can give without loving...but you can not love without giving"
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I really like this form, Ivor.The repetition of key lines reinforces their power.Your utopian vision is, I fear, is beyond our society's grasp.Yet you inspire us to bring it a bit closer.Have faith...
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So many yearn for such a utopia yet with the way we humans are programmed, is such a paradise achievable? Liked the repetition of lines and the stark reality there at the end.Lil Padfoot
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